Finding the Right Words
by Roxanne Jones, Hurley Communications/NESHCo Board Member
Here's the second in a series of Monday Minutes posts that provide some plain-language equivalents to terms, phrases and references we often use in our health communications. They offer the potential for better understanding by your consumer audience, especially those who don't speak English as their first language or don't have strong reading skills.
This Week: More General Terms
Demonstrate - show, prove
Detrimental - bad, harmful, dangerous
Escalate - get worse, worsen, increase, grow, rise
Exposure - contact/come in contact with
In excess of - more than
Indication - sign, signal, symptom
Maintain - take care of, keep, keep up
Occur - happen, take place
Optimal/optimum - best, best way
Progress(ion) - move forward, get worse, advance
Recuperate - get better, feel better, get well
Surveillance - keep a close eye on, watch closely, monitor
Taper - reduce, lower, slow, shrink, decrease
Validate - prove, test
Verify - check, find out
With thanks to the Plain Language Thesaurus for Health Communications produced by the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention's National Center for Health Marketing.
Roxanne Jones is a freelance medical writer. Reach Roxanne here.
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Capital Offenses
By Andy Gotlieb, Garfield Group
Have a press release you want reviewed?
Better not ask your fourth-grade teacher to take a look, as she'd be aghast.
That's because everybody seems to have forgotten what should be capitalized and, more importantly, what should not. Random capitalization has reached epic proportions.
Here's an example of a typical passage from a press release:
The XYZ Corp. announced today the hiring of Joe Blow as its new Senior Vice President of Sales. Blow will oversee Company efforts to establish its Revolutionary new Fiddlesticks Snack Product as an alternative to Potato Chips, according to Frank N. Stein, XYZ's President and Chairman. Blow received a Master's of Chemistry from the University of Dog Patch and previously worked as a Carnival Barker for the Dewey, Cheatum and Howe Circus.
The problem with this passage - and almost every press release that comes down the pike - is the abundance of capitalization. For some reason, everyone seems to think that capitals add gravitas to written material - except in text messages and many emails, where capitalization (or lack thereof) seems to be a random thing.
Everyone would be wrong. Capitalizing "potato chips" doesn't make them taste better, nor does capitalizing "Revolutionary." And unless "Snack Product" is part of the Fiddlesticks name, it shouldn't be capitalized, either.
Let's look to the Associated Press Stylebook for guidance: "In general, avoid unnecessary capitals."
Short, sweet and to the point. Sounds easy enough, doesn't it?
Here are a few guidelines that will help you keep straight capitalization rules.
- In short, capitalize proper names and proper nouns, such as Kate Upton and Philadelphia Eagles.
- Of course, capitalize the first word in a sentence.
- When it comes to titles, it's a bit tricky. When the title comes before the name, capitalize it, as in Philadelphia Phillies General Manager Ruben Amaro, Jr. When the title is after the name, lowercase it, as in Ruben Amaro, Jr., general manager of the Philadelphia Phillies.
- Academic degrees are not capitalized, unless a language is involved. You can have a bachelor's degree in English, but not in, say, chemistry.
- Product names are capitalized, such as Ford Mustang.
- Rules related to services are less clear, but generally should be lowercase. Many companies capitalize their services offered, which is wrong, such as in this case: Tri-Lambda Computer Co. offers Repair Service, Virus Removal, RAM Installation, Data Recovery and Data Backup. None of those words after Co. should be capitalized, with the exception of RAM, which is an acronym for "random access memory."
- An interesting exception to these rules often is with company names. In that case, follow whatever they use, whether it's all capital letters, all lower case or some variation in between.
When in doubt, check an old-fashioned tool which still works, even today - a dictionary.
Short of buying the "Associated Press Stylebook and Libel Manual," online reference options include
www.dictionary.com
www.grammarly.com
http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/capital.asp
http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/when-should-you-capit...
The article was originally posted on the Garfield Group's blog.
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Thank you to these NESHCo members and friends who, in addition to our board members, served as judges for the awards programs in Louisiana, Wisconsin and Illinois.
Bill Ahearn
Doug Bennett
Amy Blustein
Christopher Boyle
Catherine Bromberg
Gail Carvelli
Dawn Chipman
Tom Corry
Dianne Cutillo
Jamie DelVecchio
Pam Deveny
Christopher Duval
Brenda Dziadzio
Kimberly Gensicki
Jenn Gervais
Scott Good
Toni-Lynn Hansen
Michele Hutchins
Jenn Kilduff
Susan Kruthers
Liz LaRose
Amanda MacFadgen
Phil McFarland
Bob McCrystal
Lorraine McGrath
Gina Mugavero
Mike O'Farrell
Eliza O'Neil
Shane Perry
Jim Rattray
Patty Rice
Kathy Saitow
Linda Shelton
Andy Soucier
Kate Tarbox
Dawn Thomas-Smith
Sean Tracey
Jeff Whitcomb
Roddy Young
Leighann Zagami
Nicole Zinn
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PO Box 581
West Newbury, MA 01985
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